You are like a ghost.
You appear and disappear
As and when you wish;
Randomly you;
Show your presence and
Radiate your beauty.
You are like a ghost, but
A friendly one.
You are like a Casper.
Well liked and loved by humans.
Yet I have lost you in my life.
You do not have much in my life and
That is just because you have left me.
I’d wish you’d haunt me again.
I’d wait for you to appear again.
I’d stand by the window;
Sit under the tree
Longing for you. For
You are my favorite ghost.
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I like the way you used “ghost” as a metaphor. Especially when you mentioned casper, I smiled. Ghosts are usually associated with something negative or insignificant (invisible), however (according to my interpretation), you had crafted a ghost that is so adorable and present, yet distant. I feel intrigued when I read the poem and it generates curiosity in me. Why a ghost? Because she passed you by? Because she had a part in your life but only slight? because you can feel her but not keep her? Then why a casper? Someone who is charming and all? An airhead? Some easy-going character? The last stanza is sweet and has a tinge of innocence too.
Yet, from another perspective, this is rather sad. Because you don’t get the attention from the one you desire (She appears to be indifferent and nonchalant). But I still choose to interpret it in an innocent way. I love the last line “You are my favourite ghost” because I thought of a child and his first crush. It’s like loving something he treasures – second only to a toy. Moreover, Casper is a child-like ghost and it sort of echoes and intensifies this persona’s nature.. And I like how the last line matches with the first line and wraps the poem up neatly. “You are my favourite ghost” also brings me back to the theme of the poem where eventually, the focus is on how the boy wants the “ghost” and there’s nothing else to say. No cliff-hanger or options to leave audience to think about “what’s next?”. It’s a firm decision, just like “I like you”. Notice I didn’t mention “I love you” because I’m uncertain of how the persona feels. Normally a child is just as confused about love.
Oh by the way, you can write! So well at that too! Your other poems are just as great and I like that they are all ambiguous and multi-faceted, it leaves space for different people to have different views on it. There is no right or wrong, you see.
Hi Leon i think you have great potential & you should use it.